The world is in chaos, the temperature is rising and there are wars everywhere. Don't you think it is boring? By the reason above I got to a trip. "Unforgettable memory" was the name. There was only 2 people there me and some other guy. Well there are one tour guide for each person then instead of leading us to a car they lead us to a door and told us to close our age. I did! The tour guide in front of me hold my hand and just then i feel something licking my hand that he was holding so i open my eyes, slowly, but...there is a tiger licking my hand. I try to shout out for help but he calm me down and explain to me that creature on't hunt us anymore in the 25th century. Wait, I am in the 25th century? And I thought this was strange enough already.
After the beautiful scenery and the sun that was just warm not as hot as the year 2011 we are in, we got in to a car. A luxury car I mean, because it doesn't feel like a car at all. I mean, the outside look is a car but inside it's like a meeting room in the middle of a beach. Amazing!
Strange looking building such as star shape, person running shape passing by then we arrive at a field; and he told me in side the globe thing is a retaurant elevator. Well, it was! Just as I enter it went up and a restaurant show up, floating, inthe air along with strange looking people that we called them alien sitting everywhere. Some of them have really big head, bigger then the table but some are small like a spoon with a body of a really hot women....with blue skin. And a bout the food, I'll tell you it's simple as the 21st century because this restaurant is a 21st century restaurant but the tour guide told me the meat are clone animal's meat. Just the idea of that almost make me vomit. What are their meat made of? Are their bones made of iron?
And the last trip is the under water world. As you heard this you would think it must be going inside a tube to the water to see fish, right? I thought so, but it turn out to be different. He gave me an orange pill and jump in the ocean to meet people with fins living in the bottom of the ocean. The guide told me, we don't have enough land to live so these type of people developed their oganic somehow and live in the ocean. Anyway, because of that pill i got to breath under water for an hour. Nice, right. And I got home safetly, after that, with an unforgettable memories!
Mickey
Hi Mickey,
ReplyDeleteWhat an imagination! There were lots of intriguing things here. I like the car that has a beach inside, and the cloned animals for dinner!
It was hard to follow though, I think mainly because of grammatical problems. I bet, though, that if you looked at this more closely, you would see how to make it more clear.
I was really confused in the first paragraph. I couldn't understand what was happening.
You wrote:
"Don't you think it is boring?"
Chaos is boring?
"By the reason above I got to a trip."
I don't understand this. What reason? What does it mean to get to a trip?
"Unforgettable memory" was the name. There was only 2 people there me and some other guy. Well there are one tour guide for each person then instead of leading us to a car they lead us to a door and told us to close our age."
I still am not clear. What was the purpose of this trip? Why only a few people? Where are you? I assume you mean close our "eyes" not "age"?
"Strange looking building such as star shape, person running shape passing by then we arrive at a field"
Here's how I tried to reconstruct this:
I noticed a strange looking star-shaped building as we passed by a person running. (?) We arrived at a field where we...
I think you just need to slow down and make sure all of your sentences are complete and clear after you write down your ideas. You have a lot of imaginative ideas. It's worth spending some time on the grammar so that other people can enjoy your creative mind!
Thanks for taking us on a wild journey!
You said that mine is similar with yours... ><''
ReplyDeleteWhen I was doing mine I haven't read yours yet sweetie... Anyway a great imagination dear :P
Monineath
You seem you like vacation. Especially, the beach.
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