"Clip-Clop Clip Clop" the sound which i heard while I was travelling on a horse cart. Honk, the horn made and that sound made me realized at my Farm which was miles away from the town centre. It was located just in front of a large and high mountain range,the weather was quite warm I guessed much better than in the city centre and the air was warmly blowing across my face. That was so relaxing......
"Mooooooo",the Brown cow said and the gray dog barked “Woff,Woff”. A large group of ducks shouted “Quack Quack Quack” as soon as I walked in. “Ohhh No ! What are they doing?”whispered silently to myself then I thought “They greet me,huh?”.”Maybe” I said,stepping on a wooden small bridge which leaded to the the house and underneath was small sized river. “Creak”the bridge created that sound,seconds later when I was a bout to walk out of the bridge,“Phew” the bridge broken down immediately. “Argh !” I shouted for a while but I was suddenly stopped by the Croak sound of an ugly dirty frog in the mud.I again shouted “Help!!! I’m stuck in here, Here,under this useless bridge”I could hear his running , A middle aged man who was in charge of the farm.
He came and got me out of the mud and asked softly” Alone here,Son? “ I replied a bit rudely to him” Yeah,of course. I’m grown up,aren’t I?” .He got me out and took me in to the house.I was told to get a bath and after the bath I started chatting along with him and that I decided to stay there for several days. But soon when the darkness joined after the cold dinner ,I realized I regret so much.I didn’t like staying in darkness and here was very dark and the cold wind couldn’t stop blowing that made me feel even more frightened. That may not be the big matter because then the dog started barking,the cat voiced “Meoww”,”Hisssssssss” I gueesed it was a snake . The owl also started hooting scarily,”Ekk” was from the mouses and also the ripple sound like water drops.”CRAOK” the frog voiced loudly which was the sound that I hated the most,”Yuck” I whispered. I tried hard getting myself fall asleep but that sounds interrupted me and as I opened my eyes,I could see something that was............
P.S This story is absolutely Fictional,Nothing is real but I wrote it is real.
P.S.S I Guess this one is a little stupid. But here,i tried to use the Onomatopoeic words. :)
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Nix, your title made me laugh.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite parts were:
He came and got me out of the mud and asked softly” Alone here,Son? “ I replied a bit rudely to him” Yeah,of course. I’m grown up,aren’t I?”
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”Yuck” I whispered.
I just found it funny how much the character hated being at the farm and hearing all those sounds. Usually we think that all those sounds of nature are so beautiful.
Some of the sounds worked and some didn't, but I appreciate that you really tried to use as many as you could. You might think about how you could use the words more naturally - instead of saying something like - the cat said "meow" you can write something like this:
"Meeeow." The cat brushed up against me, begging for food.
I enjoyed this strange visit to the farm! By the way, when I saw your photo, I thought.. that looks familiar. Do you know why? This is only a few miles from where I lived in Boulder, Colorado! How strange!!
:) thanks Nix
Ohhh ! Teachers, could you tell the others that didn't work also? In fact a few of them,i got them from the movies.I though they would work.
ReplyDeleteI picked this picture up from the internet and i did not know where this was also,just thought it would fit my story well. But here i'm lucky to choose this one that reminds you of your hometown.
Thanks Teacher :)
Well, "phew" is usually a sound someone makes when they're relieved that something turned out well, or they escaped danger. I'd have to demonstrate it :)
ReplyDelete"Ekk" maybe should be "eek"? (sounds like squeak?)
"Argh" is one of those frustrated sounds that might come out once, but it would be funny to hear someone try to shout it over and over. In fact, I'm not sure I've ever heard someone make this sound. So I found a link on the internet with people trying to make this sound. It's kind of funny. http://www.pond5.com/sound-effects/1/argh.html
Yes, it made me really happy to see this picture. I miss the mountains!