Thursday, April 28, 2011
Back To My Child Hood
Back To My Child Hood
Many years have past.There are many things I've enjoy and there are some bad things that I've met too.So nowadays when I was alone in my bedroom, I'll always think to the past Where I've been when I was young?Suddenly I remember one place that I have been visited and also it's my favorite place too.It's is the Genting Hill in Malaysia.I can remember,I've been to Malaysia when I was 7 or 8 years old. I really enjoy to stay in Genting Hill.It also have many things to play such as Roller Coaster,Cyclone,4D,Snow House,Ghost House and many things else.I have stay in a tall and colorful hotel and I can remember it's on the 14th floor.I really enjoy to visit Malaysia because it is a really good country.Now I want to visit it again if I have time and chance
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I wonder who wrote this?
ReplyDeleteI like that you use the specific place name (Genting Hill), and some specific nouns. I would like to imagine more - how was it colorful? How is Malaysia a "good" country - what's good about it - just the games? I have a hard time picturing what it looks like. How about some smells or tastes?
ReplyDeleteGrammar suggestion - you switch from past to present tense. Since you're sharing a memory, past is probably the best tense!
Do you see how the second sentence is very general? Try to stay with the specific.
Sound like it was a great experience to visit a new country! I've never been there. I like that you show us how you are older now and thinking back to when you were young.