PIGLET! This is best gift I ever have in Valentine's day last year. I got it from my friend. It is very cute because it's a pig that has pink color on its body. Not only kids that like this piglet, teenagers too (I am). Its fur is very soft so when I am tired I sleep on it, it's make me sleepy want to sleep. I play with it when I am bored. I keep it as my sister because I don't have any sister, but I think it's a male. Last week, I talked and played with it and I hear the sound of laughing. At that time I think it can laugh but no. Do you know who was laughing? It's my neighborhood. Maybe they thought i am crazy because of talking with this piglet. I want to talk and play with it. I hope it cans talk and play with me. I really love this Piglet! =DPimean
Sweet description, Pimean.
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Could you combine sentences 2,3, and 4? For example, "The best gift I ever got on Valentine's Day was a cute pink pig."
And how about "Not only kids like this piglet, teenagers like me do too!"
Look at the sentence that starts with "Its fur." You repeat the word sleep, sleepy, sleep. How can you rewrite this sentence to make it more clear and avoid repeating?
I like that you "keep it as your sister." I also like that you thought it was Piglet laughing, when really it was your neighbORS.
How would Piglet party? :)