Favorite things? I have many but there is only one that I really love and it’s with me many hours in a day.It was from my childhood.
My favorite thing is a normal one,hand-made by my mum with the color of red with little penguins and stars on it and made of cotton. Could you guess what it is? It’s my blanket,an old one but for me it’s very important and meaningful for me,nothing can cost it.It has been with me since I was first on this world till now, was made before I was given birth .Whenever I sleep,I always need it.That’s why I always take it with me whenever I’m away from home,long or short distances I never forget it.What I like the most about is the warmth that it gives to me is as warm as my mum hands,that reminds me of how warm I was when mum held me in her arms.It can’t cover all over my whole body now,only the above part,can not reach my legs but it still gives my whole body warmth . I’ve never thought of throwing it away although mum bought me new blankets and I’ve never used the new ones also.I sometimes argue with my mum when she gets it washed without telling me.The reason is……because I don’t want to lose the smell of that.Strange and funny,isn’t it?.That’s true,I love the smell although that’s not a nice smell but that smell remind me of myself as a small kid.Anyway,mum still takes it without telling me because if she tells me,there is no way to wash it and she doesn’t want it to be dirty also.She usually jokes about me and the blanket with her friends or any of our relatives and I just try to run away when she starts talking. ‘
Though it’s old but I love it and always take good cares of it.No matter how cold it is,with this blanket covering on my body I feel warm and fall asleep soon.
Thanks Mum for making me this lovely blanket,Love it !
P.S This story is Non-Fiction. Try not to laugh !! :D
EniX
That is a very sweet story!
ReplyDelete-Rachel, Prague, Czech Republic
Hi Nix, I found this very touching. You put yourself into the writing, which makes it more meaningful. I like how you say it's been with you your whole life, and how it only covers part of you now but still gives you warmth. I also like how you talk about the smell and ask the question "Strange and funny, isn't it?" Remember in class when we read about the connection of smell to memory? I think it's really true. There's even humor in the story, with your mom joking about it...
ReplyDeletea couple suggestions:
"stuff" indicates more than one thing - so "thing" or "possession" would be more accurate.
nothing can cost it = maybe "nothing can replace it" or "it's worth more than money can buy"??
Also, you could break up into more paragraphs.
Thanks for sharing this "warm" story! The more I read it, the more I enjoy it.
I agree with Rachel- this is a very sweet story!
ReplyDeleteI wish I had something similar to your blanket to remind me of when I was a kid- which, alas, was a long time ago.
Nice post!
Big Thanks to Rachel And Phillip. :)
ReplyDeleteHello,Teacher ! I'm taking your suggestions . Thanks so much for always giving me suggestion for my faults. :)
-EniX-
Hi Enix.I agree with them.This is a sweet story.So I really enjoyed to read this.Well done:)
ReplyDeleteVisal
Enix, these are not "faults!" Just a few suggestions to improve the writing. I think no matter how many good things I say, people only see what I suggest for improvements. Hmmmm.
ReplyDeleteTo Visal @ Thanks. :) We'll meet soon.......
ReplyDeleteTo Teacher@ Opps ! but anyway i would rather keeping it as faults . So i won't repeat it again . :)
Hi Enix... your blanket is kinda CUTE!! anyways, nice post with a warm story. I really enjoyed. Keep doing great, friend. :)
ReplyDeleteoops...that was mine, my comment.
ReplyDeleteRoath
Hello Roath ! Thanks ! Your post is nice also.....:)
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This writing can prove that you belong to a much higher level! It is beautiful. I can feel your love for your blanket and a bit of your personality ,too. Your writing is very strong and when I say it, I mean it affects me emotionally. I were not laughing, but I got this feeling of missing my mum and dad when I read it. In my opinion, this post seriously and honestly proves how meaningful your blanket is. Thanks for posting such an emotional story.
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To P.@ @ Thanks so much for having your ideas commented here. I think you have something that remind you of your childhood also,don't you?
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